Yeah, the grammar is bad. The very first thing you read is a paragraph long run-on sentence.

While some might not like the black background, i know i do. White backgrounds are too bright and hurt my eyes, so the black background is tops in my book. The only exception is that wall of purple text that i didn't bother to read... you know... because it's a wall of text and i was looking to play a game, not read a book.

As it is though there are no choices, like, at all. Im not sure why this was posted to the site so early, you might want to wait for a few more releases just to even be able to form an opinion on this CYOA.

The dialogue is cumbersome, and not helped by the choice of running a dark background with colored fonts (hint- dark backgrounds make text harder to read).  There are a lot of really basic typos that should have been caught and far too many run-on sentences.  This is in serious need of editing before the next draft is put up.  Also, all the TF and adult themes listed?  They're not in the game yet.

Real early days on this. Love the premise right up my alley. 

Keep it up this has great promise. 

The start of this games makes me wonder if I'll be joining a party with a arch priest,

arch wizard and a crusader. If so thatd be fine too. 

Enjoyed the introduction!  Hope it continues and will be one of the games that I will come back to and play every time it updates.  I'll definately have my eyes out for this one!

Enjoyed the prolgue and added this to my "Keep an Eye On" list. Looking forward to the progress.