I had to return to RL and couldn't keep working on this, it is as complete as its gonna get,
Hopefully someone enjoys it, if not well then sorry, I wrote endings without editing, so they are very long and full of errors, but better then nothing, anyway, I'm orf, got RL sturf to do now, sorry i couldn't have made it better, just too busy, and only just found time to get back to this and complete it.
(LoL Love the Sandster review, keep on trucking buddy, just keep on trucking...)
Lots of grammer mistakes but not too bad of a story. Although it is very short.
A grammatical clusterfuck with nearly incoherent writing. It's short, but technically finished, which is something most submissions here can't say. 3/10 would not recommend.
Certainly does not deserve the 1 star it got prior to it's completion. By no means is it great, but it has potential and is well thought out. I am sad it is still very short, but that's okay. It deserves better than the shit reviews it got. Especially since they played and reviewed the game days before it was finished and had the errors fixed.
Not worth the time. Rambling, often nonsensical text, very poor grammar and spelling, and zero character development. Gets a star for a passable plot, but otherwise, best to move along.