This is the update of my first game about a student with two sisters and a laid back attitude to live and studies.
Link to the current, revamped version: http://www.mediafire.com/file/bmd35d59kj79ghr/Bikini_Scam.html.
The game is set in a prsent day setting with added fairy magic that serves as the motor of the changes the main character may suffer.
That main character is a young man who maybe is not entirely a nice person: but nor really bad either. At least he shouldn't be all bad. Being nice may, however, be a worthy decision.
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You are Mike, the student. Your parents want you to finish any paper at college, your younger sister needs a room (to start studying, too) and your older sister may very well be a littlle pregnant.
All you want is to deflower little Yvonne and relax.
Mike, a student. You will take that role, gentle playerperson.
Kate, your older sister.
Betty, your younger sister.
Yvonne, your virgin girlfriend who turns 18 at the end of the week.
Her cousin: If you do not pop that cherry, he will.
Madam: An elegant lady and, well: the owner of several "clubs". Also a great showmistress.
Your parents: Far away, but they can never be TOO far away.
You will be offered some choices that will eventally lead to different results.
This is a game about corruption and defloration. One character is pregnant, two more may get knocked up ingame: the main character will be there in both cases...
This is the second game I overhaul with the new two-mantle version of Twine. That hopefully make intormation more readily accessible. I greatly reworked the visibility of the background story that was only hinted at in earlier versions. And I worked on the language and the pictures, as always.
Please tell me about mistakes, typos and bug so that I can repair them. Use the Discussion Thread for that, svp: the link is on the left side.
Boring game, all you ahve to do is "click on the bottom on every page". Pics are nice but lacks of anything else to do.
WOW, JUST WOW.
Short game about one hour to beat, BUT DANG that was good, Has good replay value too. Has good elements into using a puzzle strategy build in a game.
Funny, I did better the first time around compared to my second time. theres a score system in the game, ATM I am trying for a + score LOL.
I would like to see a Dungeon builder version using the same elements that You have shown here.
ok some opinons to note here. I understand its complete game. In your next game if you make one, Please add more of a story to it. you got some... can't even say bare bones narration, I think the Final boss has more lines then all the characters combined LOL. I like the whole TF theme a very nice touch, it holds a good plot, but needs story to make it shine.The main catch of the game is using your brain and trying to score high. That's fine and all. The interaction between the characters is really weak, more of just statements on their well being. The Visuals though, made me stop what I was doing to admire every Change in the game. The RNG for TF was pretty awesome.
Would play again?
YES! Thank you.
So the other revisounsound they like might do a bit better the thread the game, otherwise this will get a tad to read.
As far as reviews here is my feedback. First off, I like this game. It is a fun romp, an excuse to see pictures within some context, and it doesn't try to be anything it not. No, the writing isn't grammatically good. That's fine, the ideas come across, and I'd rather deal with bad grammar than a confusing interface like the inform style stuff. And the scenarios being written about interesting, not repeats of other work, sexy, and flow well as far as guiding energy without sudden jarring shifts. (Well, one I won't mention without a spoiler tag, but not bad)
So, grammar. Many writers on here aren't artists or photographers, there is no shame in working with an artist. Many authors here aren't programmers, it's fine to ask a programmer to help get the engine working. In this case the grammar is the problem, and that's fine, no biggie, ask for help from an editor (every published author has an editor) and that's that. I'd like to see more with this and from you, I'm sure I'm not the only one, so good luck with this neat little rompy game!
Reviews are fun and I always wanted to write one myself.
I love people writing about my English skills, especially those who change fom singular to plural without sense.
In a review I expect to find a summary of content, a balanced position describing pors and cons and a personal recommendation.
The game is set in a prsent day setting with added fairy magic, that serves as the motor of the changes the main character may suffer.
That main character is a young man who is lazy, none too bright, arrogant and callous.
Which has let him to owe some brutal pimps more money than he has.
Given the choice of selling valuable assets or pimping his sisters, the character either gets free or falls into the trap of a fairy
who has unknown to him hidden in his fairy and is in fact one of the sisters he may try to pimp.
Unless he resists, the main character will in a scene bordering incest be turned into the second of the tw sisters he wants to pimp
and take her place in the further proceedings, which offer after some point at best the illusion of choice.
Taking this path the game ends with the two -now pregnant- sisters standing on the same platform where the main character
and the older sister waited for the arrival of the younger sister (the fairy changeling) at the beginning of the game.
Pros and Contras:
The game uses many pictures to illustrate the story: too many pictures, some critics have claimed.
The game needs another thorough proofreading.
The main charcter is adviced to make the wrong decicions and hard to like from the beginning.
From some point rather early in the game, the actions of the character make no difference whatsoever,
making the game a rather short one with a long epilogue.
Other pathes end with a single page.
This is no masterpeace. There could be less pictures and the writing needs proofreading.
Unless one wants to see a character live through a long series of strokes reducing him further and further
after failing in a very basic way, playing this game may offend the player.
If one wants to follow the donwfall of a sexist pig who has his predjucices first mirrored then applied to himself,
try the game.
Even after being updated, there really isn't much to recommend here. The writing has been improved, but it's still very, very apparent that the author does not speak English very well so it's difficult to tell what's going on- they're definitely trying to use slang without understanding the context. There are way too many pictures inserted haphazardly into the game. Quite honestly, it looks more like the author just took a bunch of porn images and stuck them on pages, then started adding a few lines to the pages to give it some resemblence to a story.