I read through it for a while but honestly had to stop well before anything interesting finally happened.
I appreciate the effort and thought being put into this, but this is in serious need of editing. i think the writer has clearly gotten caught up in the idea that they have all this world building, all these ideas that tie everything together and they think that it's all important. It might help bring life to the setting in such a way that they can write more easily but it makes reading a tedious slog. We don't need to know every litle thing about their lives, just make their behavior demonstrate who they are.
And for that matter the dialogue is clunky. And not in a "this is being written in a most formal manner" but in a "just not at all how people talk" sort of way.
I don't want to sound to harsh here. I lot of love has been put into this and I hoenstly intend to go back to it and read through some more. The art is better than we get in a lot of these things, and they've celarly put some work into this. I skipped over loads of it as it is and I'm still bored.
In spite of all that, I'm still going to click "like" and I'm still interested in seeing where things go.
Well I'm not impressed, THis is TF Games Site, and there is no "Game" here. There is only one so called choice, which boils down to pick Good, or Bad Ending, with you getting to jump back to the choice to get the other ending, so even that's not really a choice.
AS a game it;s a total failure, but it may be a great Graphic Novel, it just doesn't have any game in it, at least I could mute the annoying music, though deleting the folder would be the obvious alternative.
I don't know whether the Novels good or not, thoiugh it would be better if it had no links to next page, as I quickly started link clicking, looking for the "Game" it pretends to be.
Take the music away make it a single html file except for the ending choices, and it would be a far better reading experience, without any expectation of user input, the two endings would be a pleasant surprise, rather than the "Is that all there is" moment. I felt.
It's all about expectations, I expected a game, and got none, whjere if the novel read as such, the ending choice would be a nice surprise, not a dissapointment.
I just played this game for the first time and i have to say that i am impressed! The story developes kind of slow and you have to read some pages before the actual gameplay starts but the artwork is great and the story is well written.
There is quite some content to explore now and i found myself in an actual kind of RPG after a while, so i will stay alert for future updates, give it a try, folks!
Keep up the great work!
Its a good interactive tale, but there are some major inconsitancies, such as when playing the vampire you arrive at a house based on a letter you read, then the owner is said to have"...taught you to read, and that opened a completely new world to you."
Play the vampire if you want a story, the girl if you want something hot, although neither has any options to make it truley a "game" as of yet.