My Girlfriend Won't Give My Body Back

Author: Luno
Version: Alpha 1.1
Last Updated: 2018-04-05 01:51:28

Review by Eitan
Version reviewed: Alpha 1.1 on 2018-04-05 05:03:56

There's not a lot of content but it seems decently done, some of the longer pauses between transistions were slightly odd but overall tollerable.

If you haven't already, you might want to watch , it's an anime where the premise/first part of the plot is nearly identical to your as far as the parts you've written ( your story would diverge later judging from the title and note )