My Girlfriend Won't Give My Body Back

Author: Luno
Version: Alpha 1.1
Last Updated: 2018-04-05 01:51:28


Review by Eitan
Version reviewed: Alpha 1.1 on 2018-04-05 05:03:56

There's not a lot of content but it seems decently done, some of the longer pauses between transistions were slightly odd but overall tollerable.

If you haven't already, you might want to watch https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Your_Name , it's an anime where the premise/first part of the plot is nearly identical to your as far as the parts you've written ( your story would diverge later judging from the title and note )