Good game so far. I'll be waiting for an update.
One more thing before I go:
"Waste" means garbage. You were looking for the area of the body called a "Waist."
So far I like what I see. I was a little set back at first by the nature of the events that happen in the beginning but I'm glad I decided not to drop it. I hope more comes out soon.
It's not too bad, as far as I got into it. I sorta quit when it went from a gritty realistic-ish slave story into some kind of scifi genderswap woman training thing. Never did like those, usually the new woman is taught to be too stereotypical and the justifications for the sexual aspects are too tenous for my tastes. But yes, from what I saw, the writing was mainly fine, with a few strange run-ons in the later part.
This is a fun game. Thanks for the MediaFire download.
This is off to a very promising start. The writing is really well done, the plot is very interesting, and I am excited to see what is really going on with Asher and his metamorphasis. I didn't really play around with any of the combat situations, as those are far from my primary interests with a game like this. However, maybe once the system is fully realized I will find myself more drawn to that aspect of the game.
Overall I'm really impressed with your work and can't wait to see what comes next.
Interesting so far, I look forward to seeing some of the game mechanics implemented
"Error: Passage does not exist." Is the only thing that comes up. Maybe you messed up with the linking in Twine?