Either focus on the game part, writing an intro about being a social hermit and getting sucked into a digital world.

Or write and intro about getting transformed in the game and then getting trown back into the real world.

branching the story from either of those.

you should always start with an intro that has no choices, this provides players a setting on wich to base the choices they make.

For your own work hours sake, make most choices have very small effects like subtle text changes this allows peronalization of the story without having to write complete story branches. For example the male/female dog companion option, it's a small change. Just a the name and maybe a scene much later where you get fucked by the dog or something.

Keep it fairly focused otherwise you'll drown in it before you get to finish anything substantial.

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Choice is something that I've always valued in a game, Devious worlds is an example of the game I want this to be like, but with my own spin on it. I want to have lasting branches with the choices having a very noticable effect on the story and differences between all of them.

As for geting work done like you said in the last bit, I know it'll take me a while to finish this I was prepared to work on this for another 2-3 years if needed but before I made a decision like that I asked what people would like more either: A. getting a finished product with the content done upon release | OR | B. Watching the game progress as it gets updated  and influencing the creation process. In this game option B won and that's what I went with. I was more leaning towards option A myself, but I was convinced that option A might be the better option.

I love stories with storyline branching, I know that is what you want to make. Just don't make the first choice be "want to play game A or game B?". Write a proper intro, It's important for players to feel how you think as the writer of the story. Then give us some personalization (gender,build,haircolor,...) have this come back in the text. The dog is a great opportunity, Its a choice no dog/male/female that can be a bit of a side choice, with minor effects maybe unlocking or blocking some scenes later. After that you can start branching a bit maybe 2 or 3 story lines.

You'll also want choices that show huge differences much later on, a smal choice early that has big effects later in the story.

And lots of small choices with barely any effect.

2-2-2 rule is pretty good baseline

2 story branches - 2X2=4 choices with delayed effect 2X2X2=8 choices with minor effects.

believe me, this is how you make a game feel like choices matter.

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I agree the start is very questionable but I hope to revamp it in the future, for now it just sets the premise for what type, I want to make the choices obvious on *generally* whats going to happen but still a sense of mystery of how. As for personalization before this game I had no knowledge of how coding works at all. I tried to get customization to work when I first started this project and it didn't work too well. Though as you can see now on the VR line I figured it out a bit more, I don't have anyone else working with my othere than my proofreader which I send new passages that I get done.

I also have put the framework for having later choices affected on early choices which I won't spoil here. Personally I like the pacing of the choices and how they're presented, having "Jessi" a minor change for gender just wouldn't work with my vision of how the game plays out. I have a loose idea of how each line I write in plays out, most of it is just writing and finding a good way to present it, along with expressing the characters, counter-actions, and lastly consequences to the player's decisions. 

As for the starting story path you can see already how many i have implemented, (Which now makes me think how unfinished the game is and how I should recategorize  the versions) and how many yet to have been even started, and I still plan to add more starting paths.

I like to think of it this way: I'm going to keep writing until A: I am forced not to. Or B: I feel as though the game has enough content. (Which would likely be around 10 starting paths all with their branching paths completed and having proper endings.

Ok so this game on a scale from 1-10 would right now, best case scenario, be a high 5 low 6, the reason for this isn't lack of creativity but rather lack of choices and grammer plays a small part in it too. In the future I can see this game being an 8 out of 10 easily. So please continue your work my dude it genuinly has potential to be really good.

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Lack of choices are going to be resolved eventually, I don't know exactly when though.

As for the grammar issues, if you could point them out it would be much appreciated. I'm currently the only one working on this project, other than a proofreader I have on the via the forums.