This game is pretty simple. Built in twine using the Harlowe format, it's my first game. This is basically a test of my writing ability, and some super rudimentary gameplay. This is a straight up C.Y.O.A. It features a group of five people who encounter a power that allows them to be changed, and to change others. A father, a mother, a son, a tutor, a dog. These characters all have different paths with each other character, so you'll want to see what each route provides. Click around and find out!
As you can see by the tags, I went for a 'little bit of everything' approach. As basically a 5x5, each route has at least one major decision, and a number of them have a secondary set of branching decisions. Some passages are significantly longer than others, and you can probably tell which ones I got a little caught up writing. I hope you enjoy it! I'd love as much feedback as I can get on this.
Also, there are plenty of 'bad ends', where the route goes a little hardcore. Thanks to a reviewer I am reminded to point this out!
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Updated download link here.
The plot is simple. Space/Magic macguffin finds it's way into this family's life. There are themes tied to the characters that repeat through different passages, but basically the story is a large collection of interactions between two characters at a time, and how newfound transformations affects their relationship.
David, the father of the family. He's getting old, and he's got trouble with his body getting out of shape and marital troubles.
Cynthia, the mother of the family. She's got a thing for fucking around, and she's pretty vain.
Alex, the son of the family. He's got a big case of the bisexual mess who's heading off to college soon.
Amanda, the family friend and Alex's tutor. She's having trouble getting through her graduate program.
Buck, the family pet. He's a dog, and he like's doing dog stuff.
Click stuff!
1.01 - Added in passage prompts to warn people off more hardcore routes. Also added addtional warning at the start of the game. My bad!
So I've played one route of this game. It's a fairly standard CYOA with the principle of interacting with a related roster of characters from different POVs. It seems pretty good if that's what you enjoy and no big errors with spelling or formatting I could see.
The most notable bit about this game is that it has some pretty big body horror. At least the path I did play was about getting infected with an alien something and then remodeling the other characters in their own scenarios. A couple of these got kind of grizzly and that's not everyone's bag. My original review complained there was no heads up about this but the author went back and added content tags so you can know what you are getting into, for which I'm thankful. Good luck with your future projects!
There are some interesting themes here, and for a first Twine project it's not terrible, so let's start with the positives. If you are looking for something that is very short and diverse, it gets straight to the point and tells you upfront what each path brings, so from that perspective it's very easy to find some content for a specific fetish, if the selection here is your cup of tea.
In terms of criticism, there are some fundamental issues with this, and I use this word very deliberately. The author presents this as a C.Y.O.A, which it isn't, since the Y stands for Your, and nowhere in here are you playing yourself. Make no mistake, this is not a C.Y.O.A or a game, it's a collection of short stories (take that as you will).
I'm not saying necessarily that a collection of short stories is a bad thing, but should the author be interested in making a C.Y.O.A, I would recommend to consider all the elements that make one - the second person perspective, the way the narrator (not the author - another narrative confusion here) presents the world and the actions, how to build tension through actions and choices by the MC and then let the world and the characters react to those choices. If you have control over other people's reactions, that stops being a C.Y.O.A and feels like you're making a pupper show all by yourself.
P.S. Coincidentally, as a fellow Twine creator, I can recommend the official Discord as a hub for both feedback and help (both narrative and technical).
Strong writing with a variety of different transformations presented. Would love to see a similar game from the author with some of the transformations fleshed out more over a longer period of time. Every scene definitely isn't for everyone, but most people that enjoy TF content should be able to find something they like here.
Definitely more fucked up shit than I'd like, but i can't really fault someone for having completely different fetishes than me. If they were more to my tastes I'd love this game, because the writing is solid. The sex scenes are well written, even if most of them make me nauseous.
