I am playing with Twine again and have come to a point in the building process where I am unsure how to proceed. The game is currently only started: some great changes and some routine thereafter.
If you play through it: Where the game ends, it ends. It is not done yet but will be developed.
That's why the game is in "Concepts".
My unfinished games will be furthered during summer and are supposed to be done by autumn (Baroness add-ons, Fairest, some or other line of Need to Focus).
First party game done, second in progress and story line progressing, too.
Download link:http://www.mediafire.com/download/xa9jpxr4nwkj6hj/Summer_Camp(2).html
Updated 30.6.2015
Regarding the Patreon link: A couple of people have asked me in the last few years about a patreon link for my games. I cannot accept any money for games, or I would have to ask my boss for a special allowance to work in my spare time: I live in a country with special job regulations.
Pervy Sage is an artist who will illustrate all my games in due time. Pery has a patreon:
Perversity is a one man operation working on art commissions, while also working on different projects of his own creation. When dealing with commissions he's willing to undertake any kind of art request. While the projects he works on tend to usually sit in the science fiction, or superpowers genre of games. His projects tend to look more reflect real life situations, than fantasy outlooks (IE: the real world is a pretty bad place, and he doesn't see any particular reason to hide that, or lie about it) the real world is a grimdark setting, and his projects tend to reflect this.
The player will be handed the role of Sam, a politics major who before entering law school takes his girlfriend to a last fraternity summer camp. And happens upon some surprises.
Sam: that's you.
Conny: your girlfriend. Her sister. Her mother. Her cousin Eduardo.
Tommy and Joy, camp officials.
Moma Erzuli: an aspect of a spirit.
Boys and girls from college (19-25yrs. old).
Summer camp is a product of its author and the stereotypical tropes used by a plethora of games found here on this site. Credit where credit is due, however, Blauz has a strangely strong grasp on the English language for someone who is not a native speaker and that translates into some very well written descriptions and strong dialogue. Unfortunately, this is very much one of those TFs that basically occur off screen and then the rest of the game is you dealing with the fallout. Whereas if this had been accomplished over a series of choices or even with one well written scene, the transformation might as well be an after thought in favor of the author’s preference for storytelling. Which, is admittedly perfectly fine, it’s just a preference sort of thing.
What you have here is a well written, but not too original story-game, that has great dialogue and relatively good world building. For a game from five years ago, it mostly holds up well against the test of time.
A great premise leading to a fun, sexy game. As usual for a Blauz game, your character is a sleeze who's disrespected the wrong girl and now he's going to pay. The three week camp, effectively an extended group sex romp in the woods, opens the door for all sorts of shenanigans, from games of truth-or-dare to beauty pageants as well as ugly fighting between cliques of girls as they maneuver for status (largely based on their popularity with the guys and the possession of a long-term boyfriend).
While fairly rough still, the English is better in this one than most Blauz games. The art is montage-style, looking like it's been vacuumed up from various sources across the web. The writing feels tighter here, with a stronger emphasis on your characters point of view and emotional landscape, but this time including the details and choices necessary to really flesh out that space.
All-in-all, an excellent start, though you'll encounter more than a few spots that aren't complete yet.
Neat beginning :) another straight forward and blunt game, good at what it does. It's still in early phases but I enjoyed what was there :)
Well since nobody seems to have left anything useful i will give it a try.
1) This game is good. I always enjoy pictures in my HTML games because it gives me something to focus on.
2) I will not bash on any of the mechanics since this is the first version and therefor is still in development... but even so i like what i am seeing.
3) You need to go through your passages and find mistakes. I am not talking about gramatical highbrow mistakes but rather a dobbel letter and just spacing the wrong place. This will make it much easier to focus on the game.
All in all i like the game and if you need at someone to throw you a passage, for you to work off of, so you don't get writers block please throw me a message.
@Lerianis
Those aren't valid criticisms. Nor are they constructive.
