Nice story, with some interesting directions but it could really benefit from an editor. Some sections seem to repeat what was said in the last scene.
About half the text feels like it could be cut and the font size enlarged.
Kudos for giving full credit to the artist and having them custom make these for the story. A lot of people on here just use screen grabs or steal art, so it is good to see art sourced ethically in a way that only bigger games like Transylvania: The EroticHorror Adventure and Transylvania: The EroticHorror Adventure manage to do.
Been there played it.
Goten bored on the fxxxxx text wall and rough drawings in a minute.
My eyes bleeding